托福备考资料:T友写作范文汇总(七十二)

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145. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, people always talk about the role of advertising in daily life. Some people claim that advertising transmits some useful information to improve our lives. others maintain that it usually lures people into buying something they virtually do not need .The latter is also my point. There are , among other things, three main aspects that I will explore to support my view.

It is true that advertising sometimes tell us about new products needed by us. For example, the advertising of digital television , at the present time soaring all over the channels, gives some knowledge on how to choose economically and how to maintain effectively. So if you have little or no relative information in this field, the advertising, certainly, can give you a help. However, this advantage is much trivial when compared with its negative influence.

The fact of first-rate importance is that advertising always catalyzes people’s buying behaviors by offering a discount or by allocating something pretty but no actual use. A person , wandering in the shops, always cannot overcome this contempt, thereby taking home something that is useless. Once having bought this nuisance, one must case much time to take into account such problems as where to put it or how to deal with it. Undoubtedly, under this circumstance advertising plays a negative role and leads people to take unwise choices .

There is another fact that deserves some words here. In modern society, each of us have to cope with hundreds of kinds of advertising in every day , regardless of whether one has time to “enjoy” it. When turning on the television, one have to watch advertising. when walking on the street, one have to listen to or look at the advertising out of shop windows. Nowhere can one escape the surrounding of advertising and no space lies to produce a piece of quiet far away from the disturbance of advertising. Evidently,one can conclude that advertising is too draining in terms of time

Apparently, with the reasons mentioned above, it is not difficult to reach a conclusion that although advertising sometimes tells us something valuable, this positive aspect is trivial, and that advertising always lure people to do something waste.

修改意见:
Nowadays, people always talk about the role of advertising in daily life. Some people claim that advertising transmits some useful information to improve our lives. others maintain that it usually lures people into （lure sb to do sth? 不记得了。查一下吧。） buying something they virtually do not need .The latter is also my point. There are , among other things, three main aspects that I will explore to support my view. （这句不爽的说。 in the following paragraphs, I would like to illustrate my point from three aspects.）

It is true that advertising sometimes tell us about new products needed by us (that we need, 被动不爽). For example, the advertising of digital television （名词单数， 无冠词。） , at the present time soaring all over the channels, gives some knowledge on how to choose economically and how to maintain effectively. （这句没看懂。）So if you have little or no relative information in this field, the advertising, certainly, can give you a help. However, this advantage is much trivial when compared with its negative influence.

The fact of first-rate importance （这个什么意思）is that advertising always catalyzes people’s buying behaviors by offering a discount or by allocating （分配， 这里什么意思？）something pretty but no actual use. A person , wandering in the shops, always cannot overcome this contempt, （鄙视， marshial 本来的意思是？ ）thereby taking home something that is useless. Once having bought this nuisance, one must case much time to take into account such problems as where to put it or how to deal with it. Undoubtedly, under this circumstance advertising plays a negative role and leads people to take unwise choices .

There is another fact that deserves some words here. In modern society, each of us have to cope with hundreds of kinds of advertising in every day , regardless of whether one has time to “enjoy” it. （even if we dont have enough time to enjoy it. regardless of 好像用的不大好。）When turning on the television, one have to watch advertising. when walking on the street, one have to listen to or look at the advertising out of shop windows. Nowhere can one escape the surrounding of advertising and no space lies to produce a piece of quiet far away from the disturbance of advertising. Evidently,one can conclude that advertising is too draining in terms of time 这句看不懂。

建议， have to 用的太多。 其实有很多同义词啦。 force to do sth, compelled to do sth.

Apparently, with the reasons mentioned above, it is not difficult to reach a conclusion that although advertising sometimes tells us something valuable, (这种句子虽然没有什么不对，其实unclear in meaning, leaving them an impression that you dont know how to use the precise words to express yourself. something 不要用的那么频繁。 可以改成： although advertising provides us a great wealth of information about the newly marketed products ) this positive aspect is trivial, and that advertising always lure people to do something waste.